Paper 1 Mocks

Paper 1 Mocks Grade 12

Intro -  Good language to show you understood the passage to start - don’t forget key words = ‘promotes the experience’.  You need a more sophisticated target audience - this is too general.  What techniques will you be exploring?  You need to identify and show off.   Don’t forget a flourish.  

Dark theme?: Is this text or image??   You need to be clear.  Beware of simply describing the passage.  You need to explore WHY things are there and HOW they ‘promote the experience’.   Beware of simple summary.  You need key words = ‘promotes the experience’. 

Title?:   Is this text or image??   You need to be clear.  Beware of simply describing the passage.  Better connection to key words with ‘award winning’ - you can still go deeper to show off.  Avoid listing words - you need to D+A to show HOW ‘promote the experience’.  

Metaphor:  Much better D+A - more like this, please.  Good notice of ‘discover/uncover’ - more D+A needed.  Still you are on target - don’t forget key words = ‘promotes the experience’. 

Information?:   Is this text or image??   You need to be clear.  Beware of simply describing what you see.  You need to explore WHY things are there and HOW they ‘promote the experience’.   Beware of simple summary.  You need key words = ‘promotes the experience’. 

Price page/image?:  Is this text or image??  You need to be clear.  Beware of simply describing the passage.  You need to explore WHY things are there and HOW they ‘promote the experience’.   Beware of simple summary.  You need key words = ‘promotes the experience’. 

Concl -  This is empty.  You need to recap the specific techniques you explored and how they promoted the experience’.   Good attempt at a flourish.

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